Sorry I haven't posted for a while. I've been as busy as can be at school this week. Project due in history and Choir Concert, plus I have another community choir performance later tonight and I have a Piano Recital next Saturday.. I've barely had time to breath.
So, what's the change of plan? Well, once I finished my first draft of the Loss of the Dragon Sanctuaries I told myself I'd write the series in order from then on, writing the first draft of the first book, then the second, then the fourth, then the fifth, and then second draft in order of books... I can't.
I've tried several times and I just can't get the right feel for book one right now. it's all mush, I'm not getting points across very well and it's just turning out to be an all around unbearable thing to write. (my apologies Platypus for not believing you really couldn't write Indemnis last month for NaNoWriMo, I see where you're coming from now.)
The problem is that the Elven Wars just doesn't have enough foundation, I can't write things the way they're meant to be. I have a King die in the first part but I'm doing it too quickly. The action is in the very first and that's a bad thing. I'm not even sure what the climax of the story is, so how am I supposed to build up to it. I know what I want to have happen, I'll even tell you all:
I need King Rirakell (Aveir and Ralen's father) to become deathly ill and just die unexpectedly. Rirakell loathed his two sons, Aveir more than Ralen, and once he's dead they both hope that once Ralen becomes king there will finally be peace in their family. Problem, Ralen can't become king until he get's married (sort of an issue this world has, have to be married to become any wide spread accepted leader. it's in the third book too)
Ralen doesn't know who to marry at all, and while hesitating to seriously consider a bride there's an assassination attempt on him. Unsuccessful the assassin disappears quickly once discovered, but before leaving she goes and finds Aveir, convinces him that once Ralen becomes king he'd only act like Rirakell did to him, so Aveir agrees to help the dark elves start up a full revelation against his brother, hoping to take the throne for himself when it's all done.
Bla, bla, bla... I really need to come up with more stuff between these two parts... bla, bla, bla.
Then war breaks out between Aveir and Ralen. Ralen at the very beginning wants to have a duel just with Aveir, who ever wins gets the throne, but Aveir refuses, knowing he'd lose and knowing he shouldn't risk it so early on in the war.
bla, bla, bla... Aveir, in an attempt to spy on the Light Elves' war camp, ends up being attacked by a savage beast, (how he get's the scars on his face) and is believed to have died with the rest of his men. Well, he didn't! and after making his way back to his own war camp spends several weeks in a painful recovery.
After that time passes Ralen asks for a temporary truce between the two armies, requesting to negotiate with the general who took over after Aveir's mauling. Ralen finds out that is brother is still alive at the meeting and is completely shocked.
The two brothers, in a private meeting agree that the war needs to end (Aveir having had a life changing event and all) but Ralen breaks the news that the Dragon Council demanded that the end of the war has to come from a judgment done by Kelsin (remember that guy? Look up the story about Aberis and Audriel if you don't) and so they both agree to sneak away from their camps without anyone knowing where they're headed off to.
They make an oath to bring no weapons, but Aveir still brings a single dagger for defense (good thing in the end.) while traveling to Kelsin they run into the beast which attacked Aveir and Aveir manages to slay it with the small dagger he brought. Taking the weapon, Ralen hesitates to trust Aveir for a while, but eventually realizes that Aveir meant no evil and gives the dagger back.
They get to Kelsin, Ralen is made king but that's when Aveir firsts hears of the "Elven Hero" or the "Fallen Hero" and is told by Kelsin that he's destined to become the Hero at the end of the world...
The war ends, everyone is happy, Ralen marries Aurora and the end.
I'm missing a lot of detail, and a climax... really bad. I might add something with the assassin, who this whole time is trying to keep Aveir corrupted, and where she tries to stop the treaty from being signed but fails and probably dies or is put into a prison for the rest of her life... probably dies... I'm not sure. If she dies it will be on accident, instead of an execution.
But yes, I don't have enough to really work with, and I keep doing things too fast so I think it best if I give it some room for a while.
Instead I'm going to work on book two. I have a bit of a rough draft, but the series has changed so much in the year that's past I'm going to rewrite that section, changing it to conform with how the series is right now.
-deep breath - okay, that feels better now. I really do need to improve book one, and I'll try thinking of something. Any crazy and random and normal suggestions are welcomed and I'll make sure you get the credit you deserve it I end up using any of them, and the book gets published.
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